After my last post about the importance of formalism in poetry, I thought I'd shake things up with a little free verse. Enjoy.
February 2nd, 14:45
This is a good day.
There is washing damp and starchy on the line
sunlight learning geometry on the grass
the new month unpacking itself in the sky.
I should use all of this
to say goodbye to you sweetly, without regret
without love or sadness, but with the same ease
of parting as a blackbird and a branch,
our usefulness together
now exhausted, and my memory bird-like
unclouded by your loveliness. Yes, I will
wash myself clean of you today.
9 comments:
Enjoyed. Thank you.
'Poetical Reference?'
Great minds think alike? :)
Great, it reflects today nicely. Snow tomorrow tho'
Lot of goodbyes in your writing.
Liked the geometry.
x
Dominic: You're most welcome. Thanks for reading.
Ken: Haha, yeah, I was very definitely channeling South Pacific with that last line. I hoped to get away with it unnoticed, but alas. ;)
Rachel: You're right. But I firmly intend this to be the last one. Maybe it'll all be hellos from now on...
Enjoy I did. I like the images very much. But I don't think it's completely free (what is?) ... I see a bit of structure in it :).
Goodbye? So soon? With so much left to share?
Really liked it. Especially the blackbird.
Francis: You're right, there is a sameness to all three verses (one shorter line, three longer ones) - but it's not a set form, as such. Still, well-spotted.
Catherine: Better to leave now than to wait until there's absolutely nothing? I think?
It would be funny now to link to all the poems I've posted about this particular muse. I'm sure more than half of them were about how we were like totally never going to speak again. So I shouldn't worry unduly ;)
I like free verse, but I can't compose a decent one...nicely said ...Fiendish.
Good poem, but some naughty voice within suggests it might have profited - even just a teensy weensy bit - by your work on the sestina!
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