I often wonder about rhyme and other formal schemes when it comes to poetry. Why bother? (I ask, assuming the role of punchy internet kid). Why not let the words say what they want to say?
Sestina
Now there is all this distance.
The places where the buildings of your city
rise on the dark coast like teeth
and the sheltered terrain of my home;
the gaps where this rain-battered love
flutters uncertainly toward you.
And – 638 kilometres away – you
remain ambivalent to this unchanging distance
and my brief, excited promises of love
yet to happen. Instead you tell me about the city
and the mirrored coffee-table in your hall at home
with legs marked by the dog’s teeth.
I dreamt last night of sinking my teeth
in your wrist, and woke up missing you
or believing somehow that you were home,
as if something carried you across the distance
westward, out of your colourless city
while I slept and dreamt of love.
You hate these dreams, this expansive-sounding love
or worse, you shrug it off. I feel my teeth
water, and your letters swim in diagonals. You
don’t respond. This weekend I will go to the city
and forget about you until I come home.
I remember when you wished away this distance
and how grateful I was for our common enemies: distance
and time, finance and logic; later, probably love.
We wanted to share a kind of home –
I wanted bedclothes, the touch of your teeth,
keys rattling in the door, and you wanted a city
we both knew. I still love you
because I don’t know how you feel, because you
are scared of me, maybe. I love this distance
because I know its climate, and this city
because it is a secret you keep from me. I love
without subtlety, your collarbone and teeth
and the places we might have been home.
Carefully, I measure the distance between your city
and my home, with a piece of string torn by my teeth.
You would never ask me to love you.

11 comments:
Wow, I got my name on a post as good as this?
Jees.
Will be back to read it some more, not gonna do the WG thing on it.
Most deservedly, I might add. And thanks, I'm glad (and a little surprised) you liked it - though on re-reading, I'm kind of beginning to like it myself.
I'll probably be bringing it to WG, where they will marvel at the technical business and move swiftly along. *sniffle* ;)
I knew and forgot what a sestina was, so thanks for the reminder. And I think the poem is an excellent representation of the form :). There's something very compelling about the repeating imagery. I find structure helps me a lot too, although I generally impose my own made up madness.
You're a braver woman than I to tackle a sestina! I've been wanting to write one but haven't got a clue where to start.
I know what you mean about structure helping you to be more inventive. I've been having a go at that myself lately instead of writing endless reams of blank verse, and there's something quite satisfying about the product. It's like giving myself an extra challenge, like doing the hard Sudoku instead of the easy one.
Francis: Interesting - I don't think I'm imaginative enough to come up with my own self-imposed structure... but it certainly seems to work for you!
Catherine: Haha yeah, I read Elizabeth Bishop's "Sestina" today and though, hey, I could try that. Hers is quite excellent, though. I chose far less interesting words, given that it was a first attempt.
And the easy Sudoku is still pretty difficult for me...
Interesting form, interesting poem. You've got me thinking about having a go myself. (One could even have fun setting people "sestina challenges", specifying the words!)
That was informative and enlightening, Sestina it is.
Were you born with a poetic tongue? You spew poetry very naturally...My hats off to you
I believe it was Whitman who said writing poetry without a meter is like playing tennis without a net.
And this is a really great poem!
I am sure Ken is right. I, too, often write free verse and then straight-jacket it into shape. (And we both thought we were unique!) Also, some of my best paintings were done when I was asked to fill an awkward shape or to observe unusual constraints.
The thought that I might have a valid view about poetry is slightly scary to me. :)
Thanks, too, for 'my good friend' which makes me smiley. You are my good friend and we will conspire with words and gestures long into this century - if I can stick around. :)
I feel quite out of place writing anything here, Im a good friend of Fiendish and yes she was born with a poetic tongue! It was Elizabeth Bishops Sestina that inspired her to wright this one actually! I sat beside here in english, while I stared blankly at the page she started scribbleing and drawing lines frantically, then she finally lifted her head and said, "Im gona write a Sestina" and what a good job she did!
Ellen
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