Some more rhyme-y stuff. This is mildly racy (well not really, just slightly racier than other stuff I've posted - possibly) so avert your eyes if you're of a sensitive disposition. Okay, not that racy.
Where We Belong
The art room: pastels, brushes stiff with glue
papier-mâché, the Japanese silk screen
and prints – Matisse and Turner, Monet, Dou.
I don’t belong here with last year’s display
my hands too small, too fine for inks and chalk
these narrow wrists too delicate for clay;
and yet I find my features here, in paint
subjected to wide centuries of longing
in every pretty mute Renaissance saint
and every passive, sultry silhouette
oh all Lolitas with their teasing hunger
whose artists are tormented even yet.
Art and pornography, the oldest ruse
and we are not exempt from this ballet
the ancient arabesque of artist-muse.
Let’s not keep secrets: you are twenty-four
and I am seventeen, unschooled, unpractised
trembling Madonna, unromantic whore
depending on your mood. I am not wrong
to say I know what thrill you want from me
to say we’re both aware where we belong.

14 comments:
I like the flow of it a lot, and the subject matter isn't that racy ... although I don't really push the envelope on that either :).
I think this poem is really good.
Francis: No, I guess it isn't. It does have the words "pornography" and "whore" in it though, which makes it that bit more direct than anything else I've posted here (in my opinion, naturally). :)
Dominic: Cheers, thanks for reading.
Nice poem, and like Francis said not racy at all, in my opinion
Merry Christmas, and say hello to Kel and RanDawg for me.
Sorry about that, wrong blog, LOL, I have been visiting so many today I lost track for a minute. You don't know Kel or RanDawg, LOL.
But have a happy and wondrous holiday season.
Eric - cheers, I guess I really didn't mean to make a big deal of the racy thing, it was jokes as much as anything. Happy Holidays. :)
I think it's a great poem. It's so 'informed'. I don't know what that means - stream of consciousness.
Hey! I think I get to see you before the new year cracks... excellent!
PS say hi to Kel and RanDawg. :)
OH and Happy Happy...
thank you! I'm flattered
I also really like your blog, especially this poem.
If there is some mistake on my writing, i'm sorry, i'm still learning english(:
Hmm, you might find a few dubious searches bringing up this poem, with the words 'pornography' and 'whore' in it!
I really enjoyed this poem, for your choice of words and the sentiments expressed - and I'm also a bit embarrassed that I didn't even notice it's basically in rhyming couplets, until a third read. I need to start reading aloud (well, in my head) a bit more rather than just reading as prose.
I liked this. Very much. You really capture what's going on - the dance between the two parties. A bit of a mind game, but the 17 year old isn't fooled. I was expecting something that would offend me in some way, but I think it's quite charming, actually.
Have a happy new year, Fiendish. I look forward to reading more of your inner musings.
Kat
Wow, I like it a lot, the rhyming and the flow is so smooth, it reads like a breeze.
Merry Christmas and a Happy new year Fiendish. You've been one of the blogs that I like, and now, acknowledged.
God bless.
I agree - it's a fine poem, both in conception and construction. I like the way it works its way wryly and knowingly towards its final six words. A keeper, I'd say, Fiendish.
Thanks for all your feedback.
Catherine: Yeah, it does get a bit dodgy around that point, hence the warning ;)
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