Monday, December 22, 2008

Poetry: Where We Belong

Some more rhyme-y stuff. This is mildly racy (well not really, just slightly racier than other stuff I've posted - possibly) so avert your eyes if you're of a sensitive disposition. Okay, not that racy.


Also, I'm giving an advance "no comment" on the factuality of the story contained herein.

Where We Belong

 

The art room: pastels, brushes stiff with glue

papier-mâché, the Japanese silk screen

and prints – Matisse and Turner, Monet, Dou.

I don’t belong here with last year’s display

my hands too small, too fine for inks and chalk

these narrow wrists too delicate for clay;

and yet I find my features here, in paint

subjected to wide centuries of longing

in every pretty mute Renaissance saint

and every passive, sultry silhouette

oh all Lolitas with their teasing hunger

whose artists are tormented even yet.

Art and pornography, the oldest ruse

and we are not exempt from this ballet

the ancient arabesque of artist-muse.

Let’s not keep secrets: you are twenty-four

and I am seventeen, unschooled, unpractised

trembling Madonna, unromantic whore

depending on your mood. I am not wrong

to say I know what thrill you want from me

to say we’re both aware where we belong.

 

14 comments:

Francis Scudellari said...

I like the flow of it a lot, and the subject matter isn't that racy ... although I don't really push the envelope on that either :).

Dominic Rivron said...

I think this poem is really good.

Fiendish said...

Francis: No, I guess it isn't. It does have the words "pornography" and "whore" in it though, which makes it that bit more direct than anything else I've posted here (in my opinion, naturally). :)

Dominic: Cheers, thanks for reading.

Eric S. said...

Nice poem, and like Francis said not racy at all, in my opinion




Merry Christmas, and say hello to Kel and RanDawg for me.

Eric S. said...

Sorry about that, wrong blog, LOL, I have been visiting so many today I lost track for a minute. You don't know Kel or RanDawg, LOL.

But have a happy and wondrous holiday season.

Fiendish said...

Eric - cheers, I guess I really didn't mean to make a big deal of the racy thing, it was jokes as much as anything. Happy Holidays. :)

Ken Armstrong said...

I think it's a great poem. It's so 'informed'. I don't know what that means - stream of consciousness.

Hey! I think I get to see you before the new year cracks... excellent!

PS say hi to Kel and RanDawg. :)

OH and Happy Happy...

Camo said...

thank you! I'm flattered
I also really like your blog, especially this poem.
If there is some mistake on my writing, i'm sorry, i'm still learning english(:

Catherine @ Sharp Words said...

Hmm, you might find a few dubious searches bringing up this poem, with the words 'pornography' and 'whore' in it!

I really enjoyed this poem, for your choice of words and the sentiments expressed - and I'm also a bit embarrassed that I didn't even notice it's basically in rhyming couplets, until a third read. I need to start reading aloud (well, in my head) a bit more rather than just reading as prose.

Poetikat said...

I liked this. Very much. You really capture what's going on - the dance between the two parties. A bit of a mind game, but the 17 year old isn't fooled. I was expecting something that would offend me in some way, but I think it's quite charming, actually.

Have a happy new year, Fiendish. I look forward to reading more of your inner musings.

Kat

Jena Isle said...

Wow, I like it a lot, the rhyming and the flow is so smooth, it reads like a breeze.

Merry Christmas and a Happy new year Fiendish. You've been one of the blogs that I like, and now, acknowledged.

God bless.

Dick said...

I agree - it's a fine poem, both in conception and construction. I like the way it works its way wryly and knowingly towards its final six words. A keeper, I'd say, Fiendish.

Fiendish said...

Thanks for all your feedback.

Catherine: Yeah, it does get a bit dodgy around that point, hence the warning ;)

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